Does everyone remember the Japanese art of poetry the Hiaku?
Format is 5, 7 then 5 syllables in 3 seperate units,,
example
"My Kombi is blue
It is not that happy now
She need an engine"
OK,, so see if you can do better..:puke
Winner will be decided by on the 5th January,,,
Judged by me & the missus..
Rules is:
One entry per person (you may edit and change yours)
Must be VW related (this means you Frenzix,, lol)
Good luck,,,
1st prize is (see pic)
Imagine the envy your fellow dubbers will have when you slap on you "automatic" badge,,, change the way you drive in an instant !! no more clutch trouble !!
Do you only have an automatic divers lic? then this is the prize for you !!
It is an automatic,, but I do have to be here !!!
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DIY-DUB ·
my bug is very dead
rusted gutted stripped apart
hope i fix it soon
hows that? i suck at creative writing, only good with metal paint and the like, school was never my thing, long live the shed/garage/car hold/front lawn!
[ Edited on 4-12-05 by 1stcarbug ]
kirk ·
bloody car won't start
should not have pulled it apart
where did this wire go
thats the best i got
this is a true bloody story
i better win prize
$2.63 homebrand baja ·
festy is dung-heap
car spent money too much on
people laugh at him :P
where's peter leonard?
he's number 1 haiku king
oops it's not BA 🤘😉
akean1 ·
bug bus ghia van
for all woman man and child
love pleasure and pain 😘vader😵🥲
[ Edited on 5-12-2005 by akean1 ]
PrettyBlueBug ·
When you see a Bug,
Hit your friend (not hard!) and say
"Punch Bug, no returns!"
:P
frenzix ·
i love my mummy
she makes my bed at night time
i love you mummy
frenzix ·
i love my daddy
he tucks me in at night time
why did you leave dad
frenzix ·
mummy says dads gay
i say i am happy too
not that gay timmy
frenzix ·
oh enough of my problems, i just read its supposed to be VW related.. dammit
i love my veedubb
it does brake down at night time
i love you veedubb
[ Edited on 4-12-05 by frenzix ]
BenettonVW ·
LOL
vern74 ·
My beetle has bling bling
I drive along and sing sing
I sound real bad bad
pi22api22a ·
LOL,,,,
This comp will definetly bring out the poets!!!
PrettyBlueBug ·
pi22api22a wrote:LOL,,,,
This comp will definetly bring out the poets!!!
The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly... :P
I've already had a few giggles!
ColumBUS ·
Fahrvergnugen Thoughts
Feelings of Great Happiness
Sheer Driving Pleasure
[ Edited on 5-12-2005 by ColumBUS ]
squizy ·
Adolf want peeps car
Ferdinand built proto
Poms save idea for world
ColumBUS ·
emo hiku
die die die die die
cut cut slash blood bleeding die
my mum hates me
i am emo child
listen to me crying loud
sob sob whinge cry cry
i won't change lightbulb
let me cry in the darkness
very bad emo jokes
PrettyBlueBug ·
Hahahaha 😂 Good stuff Col-emo-Bus!
Purple Martin ·
dak dak dak dak dak
dak dak dak dak dak dak dak
dak dak dak dak dak
😂
PrettyBlueBug ·
Ahahahahahaha 😂 hahahaha 😂 hahahahahaha now that's awesome Purple Martin!
Shouldn't it be:
Whirr whirr start splutter
Dak dak dak clunk thunk dak dak
Cough choke dak dak BANG!
:P
Purple Martin ·
heh, OK mine is the dream, yours is the reality!
ColumBUS ·
putting along road
watch flames from the back window
this makes me quite sad
pi22api22a ·
ah yes,, great work all,, keep it up!!
Still looking for an appropriate 1st prize,,,,
daave
Chewy ·
Just bought a kombi,
She is a bit rusty tho,
But thats half the fun...
bugeyedbabe ·
My car is Edith
Little buggar stole my heart
now she mine i smile
😂
PrettyBlueBug ·
Aww... that's a cute one! :P
twoguns ·
Bugs, bays, so much see.
Veedub style is one huge scene..
Splits, Ghias, Type threes.
couldnt help myself....
[ Edited on 9/12/2005 by twoguns ]
$2.63 homebrand baja ·
change tyres, adjust brakes.
what is that funny odour?
no more pub carpark 😠
tik thud ding crunch BANG
stopped car, hot sun, wheres tiewire?
stupid bug pooheap :puke
kahmal say to us
why are people so unkind?
he not drive festy 🙅
A.V.D. forum
Boss says "too much time on line"
Please don't block it boss!
Veedub resto's rock
Can cost way too much money
Hooray for credit
🙄
$2.63 homebrand baja ·
ask for resto loan:
bank knobs look at festy, say
"NO WAY! you too poor!" 😂
ColumBUS ·
cheap homebrand baja
her life so torn and twisted
she likes burritos
hipichic ·
I am no poet
The Tinkerbeetle knows it
but she still goes toot
bajachris88 ·
they can't comprehend
my love in aircooled glamor
they're blind to beauty
[I tried really hard on that one. Hard to make an expression in such short numbers of words, thats the challenge, Lol.]
StenGuns ·
me likee da ute
some likee da bug or bus
grown men so sad
crewcabconnection ·
Bus restorer!
can you fix it?
-NOT FOR FREE-
ColumBUS ·
crewcabconnection
you must be a lonesome boy
he can't write haiku
pi22api22a ·
Kombi will not go
Think the starter motor blown
Guess we no go beach!!!
(that was inspired by yesterdays effort to get to a staff party at the beach,, never made it,,, but pleased to report bus now has new reco starter,, purring like a, a, a, cicada on steroids!)
Man, just been reading through the entries,,, LOL,, quality stuff, will be hard to judge..
daave:beer
71superbug ·
volkswagens drip oil
but we keep on fixing them
they are a lifestyle
😀
Anthony
[ Edited on 8-12-2005 by 71superbug ]
bajachris88 ·
whats the prize going to be? :P :P :P :P hehe
twoguns ·
71superbug wrote:volkswagens drip oil
but we keep on fixing them
they are a lifestyle
😀
Anthony
[ Edited on 8-12-2005 by 71superbug ]
hey there anthony...
yours good, i liked it but it.
needed fiddling.
veedubs drip oil (5)
but we keep on fixing them (7)
what a lifestyle (5)
HotRodMatt ·
air cooled not really
true, air and oil combined yeah
but who really cares
PrettyBlueBug ·
twoguns wrote:
71superbug wrote:volkswagens drip oil
but we keep on fixing them
they are a lifestyle
😀
Anthony
[ Edited on 8-12-2005 by 71superbug ]
hey there anthony...
yours good, i liked it but it.
needed fiddling.
veedubs drip oil (5)
but we keep on fixing them (7)
what a lifestyle (5)
Did you know it was originally ok before you fiddled with it? 😂 Now your first and third lines are only 4 syllables.... :P
twoguns ·
isnt oi-l two sylabols. same as life-sty-le!!!?!.
if not me big oooops! 😠
71superbug ·
haha yeah it was originaly right i think...good try anyway twoguns :p
Anthony
twoguns ·
me jsut looked it up.
me big dumb arse no brain goose.
slowly heads back to hole.
😵💫😵💫😵💫😵💫😵💫
dont understand though... * continually saying the words over and over louder and louder* sounds like two different tones to me....
argh! no one hear to listen.
[ Edited on 9/12/2005 by twoguns ]
akean1 ·
just clap to the words, it will all make sence🤖
twoguns ·
clap and talk at the same time!... :duh
come on man, you serious.❗
sty *clap* le *clap*
ColumBUS ·
poor little twoguns
can't clap coz he's way too cool
maybe he needs hugs
this is so much fun!
twoguns ·
no not me cant clap.
its me cant clap/think same time
me need more vodka .
hey why there no spirit glass....😉
[ Edited on 22/12/2005 by twoguns ]
ColumBUS ·
so who won?????
PrettyBlueBug ·
Patience, ColumBUS,
We have until 5th of Jan.
Then we'll know who won!
😂
[ Edited on 14/12/2005 by Pretty_Blue_Bug ]
ColumBUS ·
knowledge i now own
thankyou, sensei pbb
my foot is quite sore
winerot ·
for my partner jann
i bought a split kombi van
now i am the man
poetry & rhyme
PrettyBlueBug ·
:P
Oooh, clever winerot,
You rhyme where others cannot.
Man, that Kombi's hot!
😂
winerot ·
touche PBB
winerot ·
i just noticed my signature is very close to whats needed just had to add a syllable to make it work
towing a kombi
with a kombi is very
satisfying yes 😉👍
[ Edited on 14-12-2005 by winerot ]
ColumBUS ·
you the man winerot!
wally buys a car
pretty little white beetle
makes daughter happy
pi22api22a ·
Keep em coming all,,,
Will have pic of the prize for you on Monday !!!
Daaave
71superbug ·
i thought rhyme is what was trying to be avoided? :p
if you want rhyme im quite happy to 😀.
so is it meant to rhyme or not?
Anthony
pi22api22a ·
Doesnt have to ryme
In fact anything is fine
If you have the time !!!!!
(not bad eh?):beer
ColumBUS ·
rhyme is avoided in traditional haiku. well not avoided as such, its just that there are so many better things to do in a three line poem than rhyme.
i believe the idea was to create a poem so simple and yet so powerful that one could be overwhelmed in three short lines.
71superbug ·
yeah thats what i thought...and attempted. but we will see how mine goes.
Anthony
pi22api22a ·
bump bump bump bump bump
bump bump bump bump bump bump bump
bump bump bump bump bump!
PrettyBlueBug ·
Xmas is right here,
Hope you've bought your Dub something...
Preferably BLING!
:P
twoguns ·
split screen shows my soul.
character, feeling, style.
expressed in my ride.
:tree :tree :tree :tree
boxofrabbits ·
i feel i am doomed
for a long life of cursing
german engineers
boxofrabbits ·
Over speed bumps not
Sparking at every corner
Can see under cars
boxofrabbits ·
Speakers in the back
LCD screen in the front
No damn space for friends
boxofrabbits ·
Stripped, Primed, Sandblasted
Masking off doors and windscreen
Damn, Wrong bloody paint
boxofrabbits ·
Live life all alone
Just me and my Volkswagen
Wife said her or bug
boxofrabbits ·
Should be frowned upon
An unhealthy obsession
Fixing cars costs bucks
hehe this is fun, i'll stop now
PrettyBlueBug ·
You'll need to pick which one is your entry to the comp out of all those! :P
boxofrabbits ·
Pretty_Blue_Bug wrote:You'll need to pick which one is your entry to the comp out of all those! :P
first one i reckon
pi22api22a ·
not long to go now !!
will be a hard one to judge,,,
DIY-DUB ·
yay there is a prize
vwdubya automatic badge
yay i dont need one 🙂
this is gr8, keepin everyone happy and thinkin hard about it, wouldnt of thought all of us were this creative and poetic
PrettyBlueBug ·
Bugger 'bout the prize...
Got one, my Bug's an Auto.
I want 'Stickshift' script!
:P
pi22api22a ·
Its the final day,,,, entries close 5pm
Will announce the winner at 9pm - good luck
daaaave:beer
(I'm so proud of you all)
bugger ·
On the open road,
Dub's screamin' along the tar,
OH SHIT NO BRAKES!
david ·
he needed the money
bugger ·
My Kombi's a beaut' ute,
Great for a shag or a root,
Weboth go real HARD!
PrettyBlueBug ·
Is that wishful thinking? 😂😉 :P
empi ·
My vw is cool
so dont be a fool
look and you'll drool
empi
jenz58 ·
Too long away
Four pages too late
Now my moment has arrived
Too quickly to pass
jenz58 ·
Vent window, open Goldie
Summer sun, cool breeze
The sound of crickets sooth the soul
jenz58 ·
Smiles on faces
People point
A beetle has passed 👍
Hmmmm it's amazing how one tiny little spelling error can change the whole image 😉
[ Edited on 5-1-2006 by jenz58 ]
jenz58 ·
OMG this could become addictive 😂
OOPS there was a formula :jesus
Shit happens :rudolf
[ Edited on 5-1-2006 by jenz58 ]
pi22api22a ·
OK, sorry for the delay (much heated discussion about winner),,,
Thanks to everyone for your entry, I can't believe how much response this got!
But the winner is..............
bugeyedbabe !!!!
My car is Edith
Little buggar stole my heart
now she mine i smile
Congrats,, send me your address and I'll post off you luxury prize!!!
Special mention to PurpleMartin with his entry
(you nearly won with that one)
dak dak dak dak dak
dak dak dak dak dak dak dak
dak dak dak dak dak
and to twoguns,,,
(you were close, but 5, 7, 5,,)
split screen shows my soul. (5)
character, feeling, style. (6)
expressed in my ride (5)
Cheers all,, and thanks
daaave:beer
PrettyBlueBug ·
Awww.... congrats bugeyedbabe!! :kiss Definitely a worthy winner.
bugeyedbabe ·
thank you thank you...
lol
I honestly didnt think i had any chance of winning considering some of the entries. I especially loved two guns, and the multiples place in by some of the others.....it was nice to see so many positive things being posted.
And I only jumped on here today to see which of you guys won.
but thanks anyway.
btw...edith really does make me smile :P
twoguns ·
congrats bugeyedbabe. and damn i hate that word 'style'. jsut cant get my head round it! maybe i jsut have none...❗
amazeer ·
breasts they are superb
i love those beautiful orbs
oops I wet myself
hmmm no veedubs... I guess I wont win.
amazeer ·
how late could I be
this comp ended without me
cant win the trophy
jenz58 ·
You silly amazeeeer 🤪
Congratulations BEB !! 👍
ColumBUS ·
pfft, it was probably rigged anyways...
*kicks dirt and storms off in a huff*